SR 39: Where Every Post Is Oozing Happiness

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I like poetry that rhymes only if the words chosen are lucid, vivid, original, poignant, and lacking cliche. 
My latest poetic 'something'. That's with a rhyme scheme of abcbdebe where each d line is the chorus line, with a meter of 76768687.

Well I was John the Baptist
In a field, a cave; construed
And you were king Nazarene
King Herod of this feud
I preached a love, all-lasting
And yes, your men, they came
For love's to be subdued
By court, by cause, by shame

Speak not of your golden hall
Palace, prison, straightened, dim
I see her so clearly now
I see your blooded brim
For I preach a love, all-lasting
But you'd chance, disagree
The future's growing grim
And you've had enough of me

Like a shepherd to his stock
We were drawn, drawn out of woe
The sword can paint a picture
Yet it never paints a show
But I preached a love, all-lasting
Between both warmth and strife
I asked you with a kissing bow
You answered with your knife

Of dawns, they do not travel
As sworn companions do
I knew you had outgrown it
The dream, the dream of two
But...I preached a love, all-lasting
Aren't dreams still valid, here?
My heart's head's on a plate for you
Yet you never shed a tear

Edited by Alitare - July 29 2011 at 20:35